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Only in the darkness….
friends with deepest pain….
Crippled by a loss
Can day be seen again…
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when dancing hand in hand….
the night is truly bliss…
But lonely with your wants…
That waltz is surely missed….
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Twisted roller coasters…
Rise above the ground….
Love the going up,
But hate the coming down….
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when sadness has its claws…
deep inside of you…
When nothing seems so bright…
the only color blue…
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Time to make a change….
Controlling what is right…
No need to live for down…
When you can live for light…
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David L. Whitman 04/27/2012 from under a sky so blue….
Thoughts from the Outdoors 
Time to make a change….
Controlling what is right…
No need to live for down…
When you can live for light…
Like this part, especially last two lines. 🙂
It felt really good for me to write..I’m so pleased you liked it
Soooo positive at the end…. Gives u boost… Love it…. Thanks for sharing, made my friday 🙂
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nice poem and the photo is lovely 🙂
Thank you so much. :)))
when dancing hand in hand….
the night is truly bliss…
But lonely with your wants…
That waltz is surely missed….
Sooo true and very well conveyed! Brilliant 🙂
Thank you so much…i’m glad it turned out well…:)
At times life can be lonely even if you are in love.Have a great weekend.
No doubt you are right:)))) thank you and you too:)))
So introspective and has great flow. Most will get this one on many levels. Btw, You are developing a very personal style that will touch your reader-audience all the more. Thanks D!
Do you really think so? :)))) Thank you, Robyn:))
Yes – do think there is an evolution taking place in your work… do you sense it too? Bet I could pick out a poem by you in a random pile of 100 others! 😉 Think that’s a mark of something distinctly special too! Be proud ~
Oh wow…Robyn…that’s a huge compliment:))) Or else means they’re all horrible hehe
I like the gentle ease of this poem, rhyme unforced, and the way you set up the contrasts (dark/light, up/down, together/alone) and then offer a solution in the final stanza. Swimming nicely! Have a great weekend, David. ~ Lily
I’m so happy you liked this…It felt very good to write…Have a great weekend too!
Oh this is a brilliant conveyor of emotion
– liking the roller-coaster analogy – ))ugh(( I never could see the appeal of them! 🙂
Yes:) that roller coaster is so ready to drop us…I’m glad you liked it
Right on! Live for Light. (& chocolate) oops…that slipped out. Great poem.
Chocolate!!! noooo…Live for strawberry shortcake.(and of course light) hehehe
Great poem David. I can feel this one. Strawberry shortcake is the best!! (next to your poetry) 🙂
Ohhhhh…It absolutely is the best!! :))))
The photo is really ominous. The word did put me in a mystical place.
Yes to both…this is a favorite of mine
Just great !!!!!
Thank you so much:)))